Being Concise

Instructions: Remove redundancy and outdated expressions from the sentences below (and change from passive to active, if needed). For example:

Poorly Worded: As per the instructions, the proposal must be completed by Friday.
Revised: As instructed, we must complete the report by Friday.

1. Enclosed please find the papers that were requested by you.

Your Answer:

Reveal Revised Sentence

Enclosed are the papers you requested.

2. As per our discussion, the new policy should be received by your office this week.

Your Answer:

Reveal Revised Sentence

As we discussed, your office should receive the new policy this week.

3. You can completely eliminate one step in the process by using a cover that is green in color.

Your Answer:

Reveal Revised Sentence

You can eliminate one step by using a green cover.

4. I would like to thank you in advance for your consideration of my application.

Your Answer:

Reveal Revised Sentence

Thank you for considering my application.

5. Per your instructions, the application you requested from us has been enclosed.

Your Answer:

Reveal Revised Sentence

As you requested, the application is enclosed.